You really are a great story teller Mirlene! I love the detail here- the similes (eyes dark as coal), vocabulary (chorused the guards) and the balance between description and dialogue. Just one point – could you choose another word instead of ‘stuff”? (second paragraph).
You really are a great story teller Mirlene! I love the detail here- the similes (eyes dark as coal), vocabulary (chorused the guards) and the balance between description and dialogue. Just one point – could you choose another word instead of ‘stuff”? (second paragraph).